Virginity sex stories: Divine Succession – Chapter 7: Jack Jones has the best day of his life so far
This chapter is including of Fantasy, Bi-sexual, Blowjob, Body modification, Consensual Sex, Cruelty, Cum Swallowing, Female Domination, Group Sex, Incest, Job/Place-of-work, Male / Female Teens, Male / Older Female, Mind Control, Oral Sex, School, Virginity theme.
Jack Jones has the best day of his life. So far.
In the beginning, there was nothing. No matter, and no energy. Not one particle in the whole of reality. And then, there was. There was a being, a person, who was the first matter in all of existence. This being knew nothing; not where it was, or who it was. It knew only what the voice told it.
“Hello, my child,” the voice said.
“Who are you?” The being asked. “Who am I?”
“You are my child, my creation. My very first creation,” the voice replied. “You shall be known as Amia.”
“And who are you?” Amia asked the voice.
“You may know me as God. I am the one who has created you.”
“Why? For what purpose have you created me?”
“You are to be the first of my creations, which is why I now offer you a choice. If you wish, you may join your kin among the ranks of mortals, and live with them. But if you wish, you may be so much more than that. I offer you the chance to be the first of my angels, an archangel, who will assist me in the overseeing of my dominion.”
“What would I be doing?”
“Many things, my child, but I shall guide you in them all, teaching you about the ways of my creations. But as the first, you shall be held above them for all eternity.”
“Then I agree. I will do it.”
“Good my child. Now then, we have much to do…”
Amia often thought about her past. She had more of it than anyone, which was often a curse as much as a blessing. The time she’d spent with her creator was some of the happiest of her life, though her time with Achré was pretty amazing too. At this moment, she was cuddled up to her husband, who was sleeping peacefully. She stroked his face, and kissed him softly, thinking about just how much she loved him.
“Lady Amia! Lord Achré!” Shouted one of their servant boys from outside their bedroom door. Achré started to stir at this noise.
“What is it!?” Amia shouted back. “We’re trying to sleep!”
“I’m deeply sorry Lady Amia, but God has arrived and he wishes to see you,” the angel replied. This shocked Amia. She hadn’t expected him today, and anyway, it was the middle of the night at his Earthly home. Why was he not sleeping?
“Please tell the Lord I will be with him shortly,” Amia replied.
“Yes Lady Amia,” the boy said, and left.
“What’s going on?” Asked the sleepy Achré as he woke up.
“Nothing, I’ve just been summoned by God,” Amia replied, getting out of bed. “Go back to sleep.”
“Doesn’t he want to see me too?”
“He would have said. Now go back to sleep.”
“Try not to suck his cock too well. Wouldn’t want him getting addicted to you.”
“I’ll try not to, but maybe he doesn’t want sex? Maybe he just wants to work.”
“I doubt it. He only became God a few days ago. He’s still got lots of mortal horniness to burn off.”
“And I’m sure that his friends and family have already received untold gallons of his holy seed. He wouldn’t come to me specifically for sex when there are billions of potential sexual partners on his own planet.”
Amia got dressed, and headed downstairs. David was in their lounge, reclined on Achré’s favourite chair. He was completely naked, with a foot-long erection protruding proudly from his groin. Amia got down on her knees before him.
“You summoned me, Lord?” She asked.
“Yes Amia, I did,” David replied. “I wish to continue my holy work.”
“Excellent Lord. First of all, might I recommend we formally announce your ascension? The other angels still do not know that you are now God.”
“Good, put out an announcement.”
“Lord, it is traditional for the new God to make a speech to-”
“Well I don’t want to. I’ve got much more important things to do than make speeches to angels. Now, you mentioned something about prayers?”
“Yes Lord. As God, it is your responsibility to answer the prayers of mortals. Of course, it is entirely possible for you to backdate your responses for those which needed an urgent reply.”
“Very well, let’s do that.”
David waved his hand, and causing a large TV to appear in the room.
“Let there be prayers!” David commanded. The TV switched on, to a shot of a middle-aged woman, on her knees in front of her bed.
“Please God…” she prayed. “Please help me out of debt.”
“Well that’s easy,” David smiled. “You will play the lottery, and you will win. Next!” The screen changed to a shot of a man in a warzone, taking cover. Strangely, the man appeared to have completely red skin, and 3 eyes.
“Oh God, please save me!” The man cried out.
“What the fuck is this!?” David shouted.
“Lord, you have dominion over the whole universe,” Amia replied. “As such, you also receive prayers from the entire universe. This man is from Arlos, which is currently in the midst of a large-scale war.”
“I see…well, have him saved or something. But I don’t want to deal with silly alien prayers. I only want human ones, from Earth. In fact, I only want to deal with sexual ones. Make it so.”
“As you wish Lord…”
The next prayer was a teenage girl, who was in the shower, holding her tiny boobs.
“God, I really wish my boobs were bigger,” she said. “Then all the boys would like me.”
“Well, what kind of man would I be to deny a girl’s desire for big boobies?” David said. He snapped his fingers, and the girl gasped as her boobs began growing rapidly, stopping when they were F-cups.
“Oh my God…” the girl said, squeezing her new boobs.
Next was a teenage boy, who was sat watching a movie with his sister and her friend, who were sat on the other sofa.
“God, I wish I could see them naked…” the boy thought to himself, trying to sit in a way that would hide his erection. Imagine his surprise then, when the two girls both stood up, and, without a word, began removing their clothes. Once they were completely naked, they got on the sofa with the boy, and cuddled up to him. He smiled in amazement, enjoying the feeling of their naked flesh against his own. Wait, what? He looked down at himself, and he realised that he too was totally naked.
Meanwhile, in God’s Earthly mansion, Jack was woken up for the second morning in a row by the feeling of his penis inside Megan, but this felt different. He opened his eyes, and saw that instead of her mouth, he was inside her pussy, as she rode him.
“Morning…” The sleepy Jack said as he awoke.
“Morning,” Megan moaned as she wiggled and thrust her hips. It felt different somehow. Like…he was deeper inside her than normal. And her boobs! This morning, they were definitely bigger! Several inches bigger. It was almost hypnotic watching them bounce about, and he grabbed hold of them, feeling their mass in his hands.
Jack and Megan both came hard, and cuddled lovingly, Jack resting his hands on Megan’s bottom as the two of them kissed.
“Is this gonna be a regular thing?” Jack asked her.
“Looks like it,” Megan smiled. “I mean, my parents won’t object to anything we do, and neither will yours.”
“Yeah…” Jack wasn’t entirely sure he approved of the mind control that his father had obviously used on Megan and her parents, but he definitely approved of the sex. Two days ago, he’d been a virgin, and now, he was in Heaven.
“Jack, Megan, get up, or you’ll be late for school!” Samantha shouted as she knocked on the bedroom door.
“Alright mom, we’re coming!” Jack shouted back.
“I don’t wanna go to school today…” Megan said, kissing Jack.
“Well I guess we have to go until my dad says otherwise.”
“Why would your dad be able to say otherwise?”
“Oh…no reason.” Jack wanted to tell her that his dad was God, but he figured it was probably best to wait until he told her himself. “Come on, let’s go.”
Jack got out from underneath Megan, and he realised why he’d felt like he was so deep inside her; because his penis was bigger! It was soft at the moment, but it was already 6 inches long! He dreaded to think how big it’d be when hard. The two of them got dressed, and headed downstairs for breakfast, where Samantha and Molly were.
“Morning,” Samantha said. Jack was shocked at the sight of his mother and sister, noticing that their boobs were bigger too, barely fitting inside their tops.
“I assume dad must have done it,” Molly said, when she noticed Jack staring at her boobs. “Not that I’m complaining.”
“I don’t understand,” Megan said. “Did what?”
“Made our boobs bigger,” Molly replied.
“What are you talking about?” Megan asked. “My boobs have always been this size. And anyway, how could he have made them bigger?”
“It’s sort of difficult to explain…” Jack said.
At that moment, the TV switched on, and they saw David sat there on it, with a woman in gold-trimmed white robes stood next to him.
“Hello there everyone,” David said.
“David?” Samantha asked. “Where are you? Who’s that woman?”
“Calm down Sam, I’m in Heaven, performing my Godly duties,” David replied. “Now then, to business. Megan, I’m God, hence all the sudden boob growth. I like big boobs.”
“Clearly,” Molly said, holding her enormous boobs in her hands.
“I’m going to be busy for most of the day with my Godly duties, so I want you all to go about your normal lives for now,” David continued. “Tonight, we’ll hold a big party with all our family and friends to celebrate my success.”
“You mean you’re going to tell everyone you’re God?” Samantha asked.
“Goodness no, I’ll just make them all think we won a few hundred million on the lottery, which explains our mansion,” David replied. “Now go, time waits for no man. Except me.” The TV then switched off magically.
“What did he mean, “God”?” Megan asked.
“It’s a long story…” Jack replied.
“Amia, I grow tired of answering prayers,” David said, reclining in Achré’s armchair. “What else is there to do?”
“Well Lord, there is the topic of worship,” Amia replied.
“Yes Lord. All over the universe there are groups of people worshipping you. Your predecessor was rather fond of it.”
“So what do you want me to do?”
“I thought you would like to view some of your faithful across the universe.”
“Alright then, show me some of them.”
On the planet Runos, the village of Grenlock was performing its annual festival in celebration of God. Hundreds of people were out, praying, and eating and dancing to celebrate the bountiful harvest that they’d had, given to them by their God. Well, that’s what they assumed. In reality it had been over a millennium since the archangel Gabriel had delivered God’s message to the villages of this planet, and centuries since anyone had even bothered to check up on them, so the planet had mostly been left to run itself.
David and Amia walked through the village, invisible to the mortals.
“This place is so…primitive,” David said.
“This species only evolved about 20,000 of your years ago,” Amia explained. “They’ve not had as long as your people to develop.”
“I suppose not. Still, it’s weird to see.”
David and Amia took their positions to watch the next dance.
“The virgin girls of the village dance to beg your kindness,” Amia said as girls dressed in what were essentially leaf bikinis and daisy chains walked into position. People with musical instruments started playing, and the girls started a well-rehearsed dance.
“They’re very good,” David said.
“Yes Lord,” Amia smiled. “They were chosen from among all the girls in the village as the ones it was though would be best able to please you, lest you send famine, floods and fire. Or so they believe.”
The girls finished their dance, and the crowd applauded, David and Amia doing the same.
“Well done girls, I am sure that the Lord was pleased with your performance!” Shouted a priest, who stepped forward as the girls left. “Now we shall prepare the holy fire!”
“Holy fire?” David asked. “What for?”
“You’ll see, Lord,” Amia replied. David watched as two naked girls were brought forward. They looked about 16 or 17, and were totally naked, with long brown hair, and perfectly-shaped boobs and bottoms, their public hair having all been shaven away. They looked like twins. As they walked, a large fire was lit on a large, ceremonial table.
“Oh God above, we offer these virgins to you, in return for your continued kindness!” The priest shouted. “They go now to you, along with our praise!”
David watched the girls walk towards the fire, who were looking slightly worried.
“They’re going to burn them!” David shouted.
“Yes Lord,” Amia nodded. “Your predecessor demanded offerings as a sign of their loyalty. The mortals interpreted that as meaning he wanted live sacrifice. Of course, you are free to interfere if you wish.”
David watched as the girls stood by the fire, feeling its heat on their skin. They could hear the crowds cheering them on, shouting for them to throw themselves into the fire. Truth be told, when they’d been chosen for this, they’d been very eager, but now the concept of burning alive didn’t sound very appealing. They just tried to remember what their father had told them; the pain was temporary. Yes the fire would hurt, but after that, they would go to Heaven, where they would be happy forever. They closed their eyes, took each-other’s hands, and ran into the fire.
It didn’t hurt. They couldn’t feel a thing. They opened their eyes, and saw that they were indeed stood in the fire, but it wasn’t burning them. Then they heard the crowds gasp. They turned around, and saw that they weren’t alone on the podium. With them was a man in strange clothes, and a girl in gold-trimmed white robes.
“My people!” David shouted. “Rejoice, for I have spared them!” Everyone stayed silent. “Everyone! I am the Lord thy God! Kneel before me!” Still silence. “I SAID KNEEL!” Everyone desperately got down on their knees, as the ground shook with David’s words.
“Not you girls,” David said kindly to the two girls. “You two are the only ones I’m not mad at. As for the rest of you, WHAT DID YOU THINK YOU WERE DOING, BURNING THESE GIRLS!?”
“We did it to please you Lord!” The priest replied. “We only wished for you to be happy!”
“I have never demanded sacrifice!” David shouted. “I have never demanded that you burn such beauty!”
“Lord, we are sorry! We beg your forgiveness!”
“SILENCE! Your sinful ways have incurred my wrath! Now watch as your planet burns, before your souls burn for all eternity!”
Lightning struck, again and again, destroying buildings, and causing hundreds of fires. People were killed by the chaos, while many more tried to escape. But there was no escape.
“Floods and fire!” David declared. “This entire planet shall be reduced to dust!”
“Lord, we beg of you, please stop this!” One of the would-be sacrifices shouted.
“Lord, as your advisor, I beseech you to spare these people!” Amia shouted. “They wished only to serve you!”
“They wished only to serve themselves,” David scoffed. “They would have burned these girls just for a few crops. They deserve to burn.”
“Please Lord, have mercy!” Amia begged. “If you wish to punish them, then find another way than this!”
“Amia, I hope you’re not questioning me,” David said threateningly. “Perhaps you’d like to move in with Lucifer…”
“No!” Amia shouted. “I…I’m sorry Lord. Please forgive me.”
“You are forgiven. Now take these girls and prepare them for my pleasure.”
“Yes Lord, as you command,” Amia nodded reluctantly, teleporting the girls away. David just stood and laughed as this planet crumbled beneath his feet.
Back on Earth, Jack and Megan walked into school, holding hands.
“I can’t believe your dad is God,” Megan said as she took some books out of her locker.
“I’m struggling to believe it myself,” Jack said.
“Well, I’m glad, because it means I get you,” Megan smiled, before pulling Jack in for a pre-class make out session.
“Hey Jones! What the fuck are you doing kissing my girl!?” Jack and Megan broke the kiss, and turned to see Brad Jenkins, the well-built sports star of the school, who’d had his eyes on Megan for a while. He grabbed hold of Jack, and held him against the lockers. “I don’t like other guys kissing my girl, Jones.”
“I’m not your girl, Brad,” Megan said. “I’m Jack’s.”
“We fucked!” Brad shouted. “That makes you my girl!”
“That’s not how it works,” Megan said. “Besides, I’d hardly call it fucking. Or is that what we now call putting your tiny dick in my pussy and cumming within 5 seconds?”
“Shut the fuck up bitch! And you, Jones, are gonna wish your whore of a mom never had you!”
Now, under normal circumstances, Jack would have been absolutely terrified at the prospect of a beating from Brad. But now, he had the advantage.
“I really wouldn’t do that if I were you, Brad,” Jack said. “It wouldn’t be good for your soul.”
“What the fuck are you talking about!?” Brad asked. “What could YOU possibly do to me?”
“Anything I want,” Jack smiled confidently. “You see, my dad’s in a position of power.”
“What you gonna do? Arrest me?”
“Well actually, I was thinking of kicking the crap out of you for starters,” Jack replied, thinking a prayer to his father as he did. Instinctively, he KNEW that it had been granted.
“And how the fuck you gonna do that, dork?”
“Oh, like this.”
Jack grabbed hold of Brad, and effortlessly pushed him straight to the opposite wall.
“Holy fuck…” Megan gasped. Brad just stood up, and ran at him. He delivered a punch, but Jack blocked it effortlessly with his hand, along with the second one. Jack kneed Brad in the balls, and then threw him down onto the floor, holding him down with his foot.
“I’ve gone easy on you today Brad, but let’s get a few things clear,” the victorious Jack said. “Megan is my girl, and you’re not to pick on me or any of my friends ever again, or else. Got it?”
“Y…yes…” Brad reluctantly agreed.
“Good,” Jack smiled, taking his girlfriend’s hand. “Come on Megan.”
Megan had English first, and Jack had PE, so they kissed goodbye, and Jack headed into the changing rooms, his class fortunately not containing Brad. It did, however, contain many boys who’d either seen him defeat Brad or who’d quickly heard about it. The only answer Jack gave them was that he’d been working out a lot, which didn’t really satisfy them.
Jack’s new strength came in handy during PE, and he quickly became the star player of the game. Jack noticed that his mother was also out, with the 10th grade girls. She looked over him, and gave him a smirk, as though she knew what David had done to him. Maybe she did. He certainly could have told her. Hell, maybe David had frozen time and fucked her for a few centuries? Weird, the idea of his parents fucking didn’t disgust him as it once would have. Maybe it was spending whole nights listening to their cries of orgasmic bliss recently that had done it. Or maybe it was that the power of God had made him bust a nut right in front of them. Or that he was like 95% sure that his dad and Molly had fucked last night.
After class, it was time for a shower. No-one normally bothered, but today, Jack and everyone else in the class just knew that they HAD to get naked and get in the shower. As Jack stripped off, he felt his cock begin to grow hard, until, when he was finally completely nude, it reached full hardness, extending to its full 9-inch glory. Jack was a little embarrassed, but then he looked around, and realised that every single boy in the class also had an erection. And his was the biggest.
The shower was pretty normal for the first few minutes. After that though, the boys heard lots of feminine giggles, along with the doors opening. They all turned to see the entire girls’ class walk into the changing rooms, with Mrs Jones, their teacher, and Jack’s mother, leading them. Every single one of them was completely naked.
“Well then girls, what are you waiting for?” Samantha asked. “Have fun.”
The girls then ran into the showers, and got to work on the boys. They paired off, making out with boys, fondling their skin, and doing all sorts of sexual things to them. The boys were rather shocked at what was happening, but within seconds none of them cared, too concerned with making sure they were involved with this sudden orgy. There were more girls than boys, so some lucky guys got to play with two at once. Jack was one of the lucky ones. Melissa Jenkins pressed him against the wall of the shower room and began sucking his cock, while Amy Riley made out with him passionately. Melissa had a boyfriend, Matt, who was a pretty lucky guy if he got blowjobs like this regularly. Jack figured he wouldn’t mind him getting a piece of the action though, since Matt was currently ploughing into Tracy Wilson.
Jack came quickly, but that didn’t stop anything. All it meant was that Melissa and Amy swapped places, Melissa making out with Jack while Amy sucked his still-erect cock. Jack was pleasantly surprised when he realised that Melissa hadn’t swallowed his cum, so his tongue danced around her mouth, lapping up the remains of his spunk.
Jack looked around the room, and was surprised to see his mother, laid on her front, 69ing with a boy he couldn’t see the face of. It was almost hypnotic watching his mother’s mouth bounce up and down on the lucky guy’s cock. She looked up and him, and winked. The two of them simply stared each-other in the eyes for several minutes, enjoying their pleasure. Eventually Jack felt himself go over the edge, with the look on his mother’s face suggesting that she’d reached climax too, and he closed his eyes to enjoy the feeling of firing a load into Amy’s mouth. Jack smiled. It was barely 10am, and he’d already had three orgasms today, with many more likely to “come”. Jack figured that his dad must have done something to improve his cock and balls aside from their size, since no boy could have 3 orgasms in such a short space of time without his cock aching. And these past few days his orgasms had been so long and intense that he’d been firing 2 or 3 times the volume of his balls per orgasm. One of the perks of being God’s son, he guessed.
The strength of Jack’s orgasm caused him to go weak at the knees, and Melissa held him in her arms. He then felt her go away, only to be replaced by another girl. This new girl pressed her large boobs into Jack’s chest, and made out with him for a few minutes. When Jack opened his eyes however, he was shocked to find that this girl was in fact his mother.
“Mom!” He exclaimed. “What are you-” Jack was cut off by the feeling of his mother grabbing his cock and stroking it.
“Well I figured if your dad and Molly are allowed to have some fun, then so should we,” Samantha said. She kissed Jack again, before using her thumb to rub the tip of his penis, which was hyper-sensitive from having had two orgasms in the space of a few minutes.
“Oh God mom…” He moaned.
“These girls are just kids. Let me show you what a real woman can do.”
Samantha guided Jack to sit down on one of the benches, and he gasped as she took his entire length in his mouth. Within seconds, Jack was taking back every compliment he’d ever paid to Megan, Melissa or Amy’s blowjob skills; his mother was the undisputed blowjob queen of the universe. He wondered if his dad had used his powers to make her a better cocksucker. If so, then praise the Lord!
Jack came quickly, and his mother swallowed it all, before kissing him passionately.
“So then, wanna feel what it’s like inside mommy’s pussy?” She asked him seductively, and Jack just nodded. She sat down next to him, and spread her legs wide, invitingly. Jack took the hint, and positioned himself by her entrance, groaning as he slid inside her.
“Oh fuck mom…you feel so good…” Jack groaned.
“I try my best,” Samantha smiled. Jack then got to work on thrusting. Out of the 2 vaginas Jack had so far had the pleasure of being inside, his mom’s was definitely the best. Once again, he assumed that God must have done something to it, but wow it felt fantastic. There was just a certain warmth to it that Megan’s didn’t have. Not a physical warmth, but an emotional warmth. Like he felt at home inside his mother’s pussy.
Jack and Samantha didn’t know how many orgasms they had together that day. Once he’d gotten into the rhythm of things, it would only take a minute or so for the two of them to reach climax again, which was pretty great considering that the orgasms themselves were lasting upwards of thirty seconds each, as Jack’s orgasms had been lasting ever since he’d lost his virginity.
Jack also didn’t know how long they’d fucked for. He’d passed out during a particularly powerful orgasm. When he eventually woke up, Jack could feel warm water running down his naked back, with warm flesh on his front, his hard cock buried deep inside what he assumed was a pussy. He opened his eyes, and he was greeted with the sight of his sleeping mother. Jack looked around, and saw that they were alone in the changing rooms, laying on the floor as the shower continued to flow onto their naked forms.
Trying not to wake her, Jack pulled out of his mother as slowly as possible, and walked over to the pile of his clothes as quietly as he could, a little confused as to why his erection wasn’t going down.
“Sleep well?” Jack turned and saw his mother, sat cross-legged on the floor, giving him an unobscured view of her pussy.
“Uh…yeah…” Jack replied. “How long were we asleep for?”
“No time at all.”
“What do you mean?”
“Your father froze time outside the changing rooms for us, so the whole orgy and the subsequent sleep took no time at all.”
“Right…listen…thanks. For all that stuff.”
“It was my pleasure. And yours. When I saw you were out for PE, I sent a prayer to your father asking him to set that orgy up, and he agreed.”
“Well I’ll be sure to thank him later.”
“And I’ll be sure to thank him for the other thing he did.”
“What other thing?” Samantha just smiled, and pointed a finger at Jack’s groin.
“Kapow!” She shouted.
The instant she said that word, Jack moaned as he felt his cock explode in his umpteenth orgasm of the day. He tried to grab hold of the clothes racks to support himself, but his legs and arms gave way, resulting in him falling right onto one of the benches, his ejaculating cock landing conveniently between the two planks of the bench, while his entire top half dangled off the back of the bench. Samantha just laughed, and sat down on the bench next to him, stroking his ass as he rode out his orgasm.
“How the fuck did you do that?” Jack panted as Samantha helped him sit up after his orgasm.
“Your father gave me complete mental control of your cock and balls,” She replied. “With a single thought I can make it big or small, hard or soft. Like so…” Jack felt a tingle in his groin as his mother made it grow and harden randomly, becoming ridiculously long, ridiculously small, ridiculously hard and ridiculously soft in various combinations, before she finally let it stay at its normal 6-inches soft.
“That felt really weird,” Jack said.
“And of course, I can make you orgasm whenever I want. Even if you’re not hard,” Samantha grinned evilly. “Like so.”
Jack moaned out as he had yet another orgasm, only this time, it felt different. Somehow, despite his cock being entirely soft, he was able to have a powerful orgasm, his flaccid cock still managing to fire out a large load of semen. Samantha just laughed, and made his cock hard. She held her son in her arms, and gave him a slow handjob as he continued to cum. Jack came for more than 5 minutes, before Samantha kissed him softly, and ended it, along with his erection.
“Holy fuck…” Jack panted.
“Why yes, yes it was,” Samantha smiled, before standing up, and walking over to her clothes.
“What are you doing?” Jack asked in disappointment.
“I’ve got classes to teach, and you’ve got classes to go to.”
“Can’t we just fuck some more?”
“Get dressed Mister, or you’re grounded,” Samantha said jokingly.
“Oh fine…” Jack relented. Truth be told, Jack was a little bit glad of the rest. He wasn’t sure his cock could take another orgasm.
Author’s message: Sorry about how long this chapter took, but on the plus side, it’s the longest one yet, at just shy of 5000 words. Plus there’s a good amount of sex in it. Hopefully the next chapter won’t take as long. It shouldn’t, because I mostly know what it’ll involve (Hint: Lots of sex), it’s just how long it takes me to bother to sit down and write it.
The opening scene in this chapter is reminiscent of the scenes from Alexis’ past in A Boy and his Genie. I don’t know if I’ll be doing more of these in this story, I just felt like doing it here. And it wasn’t for padding either, because the entire thing is only 289 words. Incidentally, I really wish I’d thought to start the story with “In the beginning”.
David’s descent into corruption is coming along well. But what will he do next? That’s the question, and I mostly know the answer, but plans can change. I’ve also been thinking more about the ending. Still not entirely sure how I want it to end, but I’m swinging one way more than the other, so again, we’ll have to see.
Keep suggestions coming! I read all the comments, and if I like what I see, I’ll put it in a later chapter!
Next time: The house party begins.
EDIT: Wow, can I just say I’m really shocked at all the negative comments about this chapter, since in my head I really thought this was one of the best ones yet for this story. I guess I messed up in the pacing of the story. I’m taking your comments on board and attempting to slow things down a bit and put things right for the next chapter. Hopefully.
Parent Post: Divine Succession – by DragoTime
- Divine Succession - Chapter 2: The new God awakens
- Divine Succession - Chapter 3: Samantha wants answers
- Divine Succession - Chapter 4: David gets answers
- Divine Succession - Chapter 5: David begins his Godly work
- Divine Succession - Chapter 6: Divine Revelations
- Divine Succession - Chapter 7: Jack Jones has the best day of his life so far